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Title :                UP 2 MARS

Description:  ALIEN INVASION  AND ALIENS KIDNAP ALL THE TALKING DOGS! EVEN RUSSEL’S DOG! THEY HAVE TO                                  DO SOMETHING TO SAVE THEIR FRIENDS. JOIN RUSSEL, OLD MAN AND KEVIN ON THEIR DANGEROUS                                  QUEST  TO MARS TO SAVE THE DOGS.

Title:   Dracula’s Castle

What it’s about: 4 young teenagers goes to visit Count Dracula’s Castle! On their way they face obstacles. The story is about them overcoming their obstacles as a community for survival…

What i hope the readers will get: The readers will get a spine tingling fright.

Decisions I made: I chose not to the describe my characters a lot cos I thought that it’ll be boring. 

The story so far

Duncan, Arthur, Russell and Peter are good friends. One day these curious young lads decided to visit Count Dracula’s castle which was in Transylvania, their home town! Somehow they got permission from their parents and hired a four wheel drive jeep and went out for the dark roads that led to the Dracula’s Castle.

“Are we there yet?” Arthur asked for the tenth time. “No!” Duncan replied. “Driving in these roads ain’t easy, especially when there are no street lamps.” Duncan was driving. He was the only one who had learnt how to drive back in the city. It was a moon less night and the road ahead them was pitch black. They heard strange noises. “Man this place gives me goose bumps!” Russel said. Peter had fallen asleep. They had driven for five hours. The road never seemed to end. There weren’t any houses to be seen. Just then there seemed something on the road. Something blocking their way! Duncan could not stop the vehicle in time and hit what ever that was. They stepped out of the jeep. To there amazement it was a wolf. It was dead. “This is awesome! Lets take a picture of it.” Arthur said. They went back to the jeep to bring their cameras. But when they came back the dead wolf had vanished! “That’s odd.” Peter said. And they all went back to the jeep and continued their journey.

The lads then came across something that looked like a restaurant. It did not look that big but it was still open. And they were starving. They went inside. An old man came to greet them. He wiped off four dusty chairs and a table for them. The sat down. The old man asked them what they want. “Bring us the best thing that you have in the menu and some wine.” Russell told him and the others agreed. The old man went to the kitchen to prepare the food. Five minuets later he came back with the food. It smelled good and it tasted good too. The four finished their dinner and Duncan got ready to pay the bill. “No thanks sir. We serve free food for our guest.” The man said. They thanked him. “Wow! That stuff was really good. What was it?” Peter asked curiously. “It is half cooked bat meat sir.” He said with a grin starting to spread on his face. The four almost choked and vomited. They quickly ran to the jeep and went on. “You know what I learnt? Never eat in a restaurant in Transylvania.” Russell said with a disgusting expression on his face.

They reached the gates of the castle. It was open. They parked their jeep in the castle’s courtyard. They built a tent outside the castle door. They got some clean water from the river behind the castle. They slept but not for long. They heard the spine tingling howls of the man-eating wolves and the flapping wings of the blood drinking bats. They had to go inside the castle otherwise they will be the easy victims of these fowl creatures. The four strong lads managed to push the heavy door of the castle. They entered the castle. They lit a candle. Then they heard a noise. The four lads went to the tallest tower. When they looked down at the river bank they saw a man with a black cape and a white face. He was holding a woman. Then suddenly they saw two fangs coming from the man’s mouth. They watched horribly as the man bit the woman’s neck and sucked the blood. Then with blood dripping down his face he turned into a bat and dragged the helpless unconscious body to a dark room and put it inside and flew away. “What in the name of Jesus Christ was that?” Arthur asked. “That my friend was………count Dracula.” Duncan replied. “That can’t be true! I once read that he was not killed but destroyed by the angry nearby villagers.” “We’ll see lads, we’ll see.” Duncan grinned. “Oh! Oh! I don’t like the sound of that. Something tells me that we are going to be on a lot of hot water!” Arthur muttered. And for once he was right. Duncan wanted to go inside that room! But their curiosity overtook their fear. “We came here together and we will even die together.” The others agreed to come with him. They got a torch and went inside. With the help of the torch they figured out what seemed to be boxes. “They are…………coffins.” But that wasn’t the only thing they found, most of the coffins had bodies inside them! They all freaked out when Arthur opened the nearest coffin to him. The lady they saw was inside. It was all clear to them. Every victim of the count Dracula had been brought to this room and was put in coffins. “I once read that when a vampire drinks the blood from someone that person becomes a vampire too!”Peter said with a scared expression on his face. Duncan explored the room and found a small box. He opened it and found a piece of paper and a packet of powder. He had no idea what the powder was but when he smelled it he smelled it’s strong smell. The piece of paper had writings on it. The writings seemed like ancient symbols. The paper said:

‘ÇÖÛŋţ ĐƦƋƆƕƪƋ’Ş βζϘÖƌ ƌƦïŋĸ ąŧ ƝïƓħƫ ŸőŨ βė ˅ȧɱǷȋȐȅ.’

“What does it say dude?” they asked Duncan. Duncan somehow figured out what was written. “It says ‘Count Dracula’s blood, drink at midnight you become a vampire like him.” “And this might be his blood.” He said holding the packet of powder. “Cool let’s try it.” Arthur was the only one with crazy ideas but Russell and Peter agreed with him. “I don’t think so, this says how to become a vampire but it doesn’t say how to transform back to a human.” Duncan said doubtfully. But his companions made him agree with them. So it was decided they were going to try it on Arthur because he volunteered first. At midnight that night the four lads went down to the hall of the castle and in front of a mirror Arthur dissolved the blood powder with some water in a glass. Then at sharp midnight he took a small sip. “Guys this stuff is really good.” He said and drank the whole thing in one go. They all froze and watched. 1 min. passed midnight. “According to my calculations it should work right now.” Just then Arthur fell unconsciously to the floor. The others dared not to touch him. He woke up again but this time he had two fangs coming from his mouth. Without warning Arthur attacked. One vampire against three strong men it was still a handicap in favor for the vampire. But Russell and Peter had been earlier given instructions by Duncan to be armed just in case things went bad. Now that things have gone bad it was time for them to use the heavy baseball bats that they were hiding. They took their weapons and started beating the vampire until it was down on the floor. “I think we killed it.” “What have we done? We killed our best mate!” “It’s all over guys we are murderers.” ” Now let’s dig a grave and bury him before someone sees it.” “Rest in peace my friend.” They dug a hole and buried him there. “Let’s get out of here.” They got on the jeep and went away. Four came to Dracula’s castle but three only left.

Blood thirsty wolves and all the other creatures came near Arthur’s grave. The animals watched him dig his way out of the grave. “You can’t kill a vampire you have to DESTROY it.” Arthur laughed. “Now time for revenge.” He said with a smile spreading on his face. He walked out of his own grave.

Mr. Wilson, Peter’s neighbor, knocked on his room door. Like his friends Peter lived in a flat. But he lived some distance away from Russell and Duncan. (Russell and Duncan are also roommates.) “Peter son I got a phone call from your parents they said me to tell you that your grandmother died this morning and they want you there.” He said without pausing to take his breath. “But if grandma died why didn’t they call me?” “Your parents said they could not contact you for some communication problem.” “Ok, Mr. Wilson could you give me a ride to my gran’s house?” “No worries Peter son I could give you a drive.” Peter quickly got dressed up and got in Mr. Wilson’s car. They drove without even speaking to each other. But for some reason Mr. Wilson seemed to go in the opposite direction to Peter’s grandmother’s house instead he was heading towards Dracula’s castle! “Why are we going this way?” “Do not ask questions!” He snapped. Peter was confused. Back in Peter’s flat Mr. Wilson was fast asleep. The Wilson who was currently with Peter was Arthur himself in a disguise to get Peter. His grandmother wasn’t dead it was just what Arthur wanted Peter to know. Peter, with no idea that he was heading for great danger, was sitting helplessly in the car that was heading straight for Dracula’s castle.

The car stopped in front of the big gate of Dracula’s castle. Peter saw Arthur take his true form. “Arthur, are you still alive?” Peter asked. “Yes but I am just a dead spirit. My body lies in a coffin in that room we found. And soon you’ll join me.” Saying that sprang on to Peter and started sucking his blood. After that his body was taken to the coffin room and was put in a coffin. Then Peter too became a vampire like his friend. “One down two more to go.” Arthur said to himself. His companion nodded.

Russell and Duncan tried to contact Peter but couldn’t. His cell phone was switched off. They waited Peter to contact them. Then on one afternoon Peter came rushing to them. “Russ, Dun you got to help me.” “What’s up Pete?” “No time to explain get in the car.” He was pointing at Wilson’s car. The two did just that. Peter got in the driving seat and accelerated the car and drove as if he was been chased. He drove in the roads that lead to Dracula’s castle. Duncan got uncomfortable with not knowing what was happening and he started questioning Peter. Peter did not respond to him. Then to Duncan’s horror he saw two canines coming out of Peter’s mouth. All was clear to him. Arthur was taking revenge. They got down when Peter unlocked the car in front of the door of the castle. Russell and Duncan were forced to go inside. Russell had to be dragged in. When they were inside the two knew that there was no escape. They were brought in front of Arthur. “Well done Peter.” He said. “And for our guests I give you one chance to join us.””We’ll never join you!” The two refused. “Very well.” Saying that Arthur with ease lifted Russell by the neck and sank his pointed teeth into Russell’s skin, Duncan was surprised at Arthur’s strength and watched horribly as his friend getting turned in to a vampire. He was next. Arthur was finished with Russell and was coming for him. But unlike the other three Duncan was catholic and always wore the cross around his neck. The cross was small but it did the trick. Duncan held it in front of him and the vampires could not touch him. “Not so strong under wooden cross are you……………you blood drinking beast. Do you yield and release my friends?” Duncan said it with all his courage. The vampires ran away from Duncan, screaming. Duncan did not leave. He was too scared to outside in the dark. He waited for the sun to shine, no vampires hate sun light. Then when the sun finally shone he quickly got in the car. The keys were still there, how stupid of a vampire to forget that! Duncan knew exactly what to do. He drove to the local church. He told the priest everything that happened. Then the priest made him repeat it. After listening to Duncan’s tale the priest agreed to help him. “The curse of Dracula, you are not its first victim. The curse could only be broken by the holy cross.” The priest said. “Don’t worry, we priest have dealt with dark things like this before. It should be a piece of cake!” he made it sound easy. “Vampires come from their coffins after midnight. We must get to the castle before sun down and get ready. Remember be on your guard at all times. When the sun goes down we hang garlic on the castle’s walls. At midnight we go to the coffin room and you find your friends. It’ll be a shocking site, oh yes it’ll be, finding your own friends in coffins. However you will place these three holy crosses, which have been bathed in holy water and been captivated with holy paper, on the center of each one chest. Then I’ll read out the charm and your friends’ souls will be saved.” He said. Duncan nodded. It was a good plan but will it work, that was what bugged Duncan. Well it was decided they took the holy items and garlic. They drove to the castle in a van. They went inside the castle. After sun-down they hung garlic on walls and just after midnight they went to the coffin room to finish off their business. Duncan opened the nearest coffins and to his surprise he found his two friends, Russel and Peter. They were unconsciously lying in their coffins! Duncan did exactly what he was told. He placed a cross each on his friends’ chests. He then went to find Arthur. There were hell of a lot of coffins out there and according to the priest time was his enemy right now. “I can’t seem to find Arthur you carry on with the other two.” Duncan said. The priest took out a thick book and flipped over pages until he found what he was looking for. Then he read something under his breath like a wizard casting a spell. Then Russell and Peter woke up! Duncan ran to meet his friends.”I am so glad that you guys are back.”He said. “Careful they are weak and need to be rested. Get them out of this foul place.” the priest ordered Duncan. Duncan took his friends one by one to the van and told them to stay there. Then he came back for Arthur. He had to open quite a lot of coffins before he found Arthur. To his joy he found Arthur in the other corner of the room. He looked at the huge windows to see a star less night. The sky was getting lighter, it was almost morning. It has all come to this, he opening coffins and freeing his friends from an ancient curse. With no further delay he laid the cross on Arthur’s chest. Just then Arthur’s eyes opened and he grabbed Duncan by the throat. He got up from the coffin, his grip firm on his victim’s neck. Duncan had no chance of escape. The priest watched helplessly as Arthur wrestled Duncan. When all hope seemed lost, there was a flash of light. The morning was upon them. Sunlight filled the room and Arthur screamed and his grip around Duncan’s loosened and Duncan got free. Arthur fell to the ground still screaming as if he was burning. Duncan quickly got the cross on Arthur’s chest. He had to hold the cross in place because Arthur was moving fiercely. However the priest did his job well and they were able to save Arthur. The four lads and the priest got in the van and drove away from the castle wishing they would never come there again. They went to the church and had breakfast. The four went to their houses and lived their normal lives. They did not talk about the obstacles they faced in the Dracula’s castle.

My community story is going to be about:

Four young teens that live in Transylvania. These curious lads goes to see the Dracula’s Castle, a haunted old castle like building build many centuries ago.  the story is about how they face and over come obstacles that are a threat for their survival.

SAWSOME  - so awesome

ZOMBBOT – a zombie robot

SUPRAZY – super crazy

SOOXCIETING – spooky but exciting

RUWALKING – running and walking at the same time

SPEATING - speaking and eating at the same time

ROTFALOL –    Rolling On The Floor And Laughing Out Loud

Last week I found the most amazing setting for a story ever. Guess what it was the M9 lasser battlefeild at crown entertainment! The thing that most amazed me was the room lighting and sourounding sound effects! The place was so dark that the only possible way  that we could see anyone was from the lights in their guns and armor. I thought to use this setting for a allien invation/war sort of story.

Till whenever……..

During the last few days we learnt about polt. We wacthed a video clip from Keith Grey. From all what Ms Baker said the thing I lernt about plot was that there should be a problem to a story to make it interesting and wanting to read. The conflict/problem could be a fight,  somthing bad happening to someone, quest, lost/found it could be anything! I have a problem with my chinese home work I wonder wether I could turn it to a story.

staying cool

At the moment we are discussing about characters and plots. We watchedsome Keith Grey videos. We are planning to go on an excurtion  to the Melbourne Writers festival.

Staying cool

For my draft entry I chose  a draft that we did on the very first day of our Creative Writing class.

My day so far…….

It was wednesday. I woke up at 6.00 am! Had a bit of a sleepy start, ate my breakfast and dressed up quickly. I knew time was my enemy at that stage. How ever when I looked up the clock I couldn’t believe it. For a moment I thought my eyes were playing tricks on me. I was so late! I missed the bus and my mum had to drive me to the station. I caught the Flinder street train. I couldn’t believe it the train was missing a carriage! It was crowded. I squashed in; Got down at Jewell station and headed for the school; got to my locker took my books; had a chat with a mate; heard the bell; went to class and here I am.